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New Article - CaffeinePowered - 12-10-2008

:Smile

Zargon put this up for me on his website, spectacle rock, look for more like it in the future on different games.

There's still a few typos in it, let me know what you think.

Re: New Article - Dave - 12-10-2008

(12-10-2008, 09:39 AM)CaffeinePowered link Wrote: :Smile

Zargon put this up for me on his website, spectacle rock, look for more like it in the future on different games.

There's still a few typos in it, let me know what you think.

was okay n that, but the first 2 paragraphs lead me to beleive there would be a sweet battle story, but it just ended up being a description of the area and summary of how planetside works


6/10

Re: New Article - CaffeinePowered - 12-10-2008

(12-10-2008, 09:48 AM)Dave link Wrote: [quote author=CaffeinePowered link=topic=1950.msg54359#msg54359 date=1228919975]
:Smile

Zargon put this up for me on his website, spectacle rock, look for more like it in the future on different games.

There's still a few typos in it, let me know what you think.

was okay n that, but the first 2 paragraphs lead me to beleive there would be a sweet battle story, but it just ended up being a description of the area and summary of how planetside works


6/10
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That's actually a fairly good suggestion, I could add on an addendum before I try submitting it to like Digg or Reddit, Id really have to dig deep for good gunuku stories

Re: New Article - Wedge - 12-10-2008

I honestly don't think it makes a fuckbit of sense to anyone who hasn't played Planetside.  And you speak too much in general terms about the area of the game, instead of bringing up something specific or more relatable like that RPS article.  Especially when you have a title that makes it sound like a particular incident.  And please use a semicolon or second sentence at the end of the first paragraph, the timing doesn't feel dramatic enough with just a comma.

Re: New Article - Blues - 12-10-2008

Ohi there, I am looking for news/review/preview team staff for my site, do you do stuff regularly, cause this is good. :o Could use a bit of work but practice makes perfect.

Re: New Article - CaffeinePowered - 12-10-2008

(12-10-2008, 10:11 AM)Blues link Wrote: Ohi there, I am looking for news/review/preview team staff for my site, do you do stuff regularly, cause this is good. :o Could use a bit of work but practice makes perfect.

Definitely not the best piece Ive written, my old stuff is on my cblog on destructoid, two articles got front paged as well.

Thanks for all the feedback though, Ill probably work on some revisions to the article tomorrow, I was planning on making this a series and have more ideas lined up, I just need to figure out a formula to keep all of them interesting.

Re: New Article - CaffeinePowered - 12-14-2008

Heres the revision - extra stuff only

[new stuff]
My favorite memory was not actually near the bridge, nor was it near the base. Driving a tank around those areas was always a lot of fun, but for a moment to truly be memorable in all the chaotic spam that accompanies battles in Planetside, an almost perfect storm of circumstances to create a meet-up of epic proportions.

The outfit I helped run at the time, called Planetside Triads, ran tank columns, when we all logged on the battle on Cyssor was well under way, the Vanu having Itan and Kaang and pushing against Gunuku. The ten of us got in our tanks, formed a column of five and warped into the southern warpgate of the continent.

We drive north along the western road, intent on going over the water and flanking Gunuku from the east. Right where the road splits to go to either east to Itan or west toward Tore, the forest breaks and right in front of us, nearly point blank traveling east toward Itan is a column of five enemy vanguards. I didn’t realize until after the battle that nothing interfered, no friendly our enemy troops poked their heads in, just our column, versus theirs.

My gunner, my gunner immediately opens up on their lead tank, the driver barely seems to notice as he continues to drive, the shots barely glancing off his much heavier armor. The screen flashes red and the health bar of the tank turns a quarter red, the second tank in their column’s gunner returned fire. The cry goes out over ventrilo “SCATTER!”, our column splits up, weaving between the confused gunners, our thinner and more streamlined tanks hid the size of our column, the number of targets and our speed momentarily confuses them.

The tanks continue to exchange blows, weaving in and out of the trees, but neither group looks ready to retreat, at this range our magriders can’t engage in this kind of a slugging match, and two of my squadmate’s names go dark indicating their tank has been destroyed.

“Run to the water”, one of the other drivers says over vent, and we turn to run to the safest place for a magrider, open water. While shells will explode on land and cause splash damage, they pass through the water, meaning only direct hits on our nimble tanks will do any damage, a difficult feat for any of their gunners.

They get greedy, chasing us all the way down to the shore, the entire column does an about face to bring both the driver and main guns to bear on their tanks. The four remaining magriders concentrate all their fire on the vanguard stupid enough to chase us all the way to the waterline, his tank’s remaining health evaporates and the vehicle explodes into flaming wreckage. The NC column realizing their mistake turns to flee up the hill in front of the shoreline and out of view of our line of sight rail cannons. One more of their tanks that ventured too close to the water explodes as he was about to crest the hill out of sight.

Now it is our turn to chase them, all of our tanks are hurt and theirs are much less damaged overall, despite their numeric disadvantage. Our magriders quickly catch up to the slow lumbering vanguards, we weave in and out of the trees effortlessly, taking pot shots at their retreating column, this is a battle we can win. As the forest clears into a wide open plain, we have the advantage of being able to sit far away near the forest and take shots with sniper like precision, while they must attempt lob shells into the trees.

Another vanguard explodes, their remaining two tanks turn in a last ditch suicidal effort to at least take down a few more of us with them. My view is blinded as a shell hits the front of the tank, a direct hit takes my life down to a quarter. Another squadmate’s tank explodes, as does one of theirs, another shell explodes near my tank, its life now down to a tiny fraction. A message flashes on my screen ‘you have lost control of this vehicle’, my gunner and the other tanks focus their fire on the last vanguard, I wait for the inevitable respawn bar, but it never comes, the vanguard sits a burning hulk a few meters from my tank, breathing a sigh of relief I get out and begin to repair what’s left of my magrider.
[/new stuff]

While Planetside still exists, battles like this one are largely a thing of the past thanks to dwindling populations. The game itself still offers the largest battlefields, and the small but very devoted player base of long time veterans keeps the game chugging along, while still having population levels in-game larger than any other MMOFPS still on the market today.

For those Planetside veterans that experienced it, the battle of Gunuku is the closest many are ever going to get to a real battlefield.


Re: New Article - Dave - 12-14-2008

epic.

Re: New Article - Scary Womanizing Pig Mask - 12-14-2008

11/10, would read again

In seriousness, I did very much enjoy it. It was quite invigorating and makes me want to get in on Planetside (which I assume was you're intention Wink)

Re: New Article - rumsfald - 12-14-2008

You need a editor.

(12-10-2008, 10:02 AM)Wedge link Wrote: I honestly don't think it makes a fuckbit of sense to anyone who hasn't played Planetside.
That. Describe the vehicles, towns, and factions. Don't overly-rely on in-game Proper names, as your audience is more likely to be unfamiliar with the game and specifics.
(12-10-2008, 10:02 AM)Wedge link Wrote: And you speak too much in general terms about the area of the game
And that.

Quote:Picture this: you are on a large continent and you have just finished capturing two enemy bases. As your flag flies over them, you crest a modest hill to see a short bridge connected to an island. As your forces gear up to renew their attack, the enemy across the waterway is preparing for a counter offensive - In a few short minutes upwards of 600 or more people are going to converge on this singular bridge and base.

Gunuku is the name of the central base on the largest continent in the game. Situated on an island with three bridges, the dropship center is easily fortified and defended. To the west of the base lies a tightly packed forest, mostly impassable to vehicles. To the North and South lie the bridges connecting it to the main continent and two smaller satellite towers. And to the east lies a flat, open plain suited to vehicles and the base’s back entrance for infantry to attempt to assault.
Department of redundancy department.

Quote:For those Planetside veterans that experienced it, the battle of Gunuku is the closest many are ever going to get to a real battlefield.
No. Just no. It's trite and it adds nothing while it detracts for anyone who has ever been in a real war. If you want to end on a nostaglic note, then you can talk about how the battle of Gunuku is one of the most chaotic / exciting / thrilling gaming experiences. If that is even needed to close the article.

Re: New Article - Versus - 12-14-2008

(12-14-2008, 03:28 PM)rumsfald link Wrote: You need a editor.

lulz

Re: New Article - CaffeinePowered - 12-14-2008

Point taken Rummy

Re: New Article - Dave - 12-14-2008

rummy = war vet?

Re: New Article - Geoff - 12-14-2008

Does anyone even read spectacle rock but us?  ???

Re: New Article - x - 12-14-2008

(12-14-2008, 06:16 PM)Dave link Wrote: rummy = war vet?

Caff = Delboy

Re: New Article - ZargonX - 12-14-2008

(12-14-2008, 06:16 PM)Geoff link Wrote: Does anyone even read spectacle rock but us?  ???

Well, not too many people yet, but that's called building up a website.  Traffic doesn't show up just because you launch a site; you've got to work for it.  In the meantime, I'm just working on gathering good content and getting the name out there.  If anyone has any "marketing" suggestions, let me know.

Re: New Article - CaffeinePowered - 12-14-2008

(12-14-2008, 08:42 PM)ZargonX link Wrote: [quote author=Geoff link=topic=1950.msg55317#msg55317 date=1229296609]
Does anyone even read spectacle rock but us?  ???

If anyone has any "marketing" suggestions, let me know.
[/quote]

Start submitting things to digg, redit, ect

Re: New Article - Vandamguy - 12-14-2008

i suggest tits.


Re: New Article - ZargonX - 12-14-2008

(12-14-2008, 10:41 PM)CaffeinePowered link Wrote: [quote author=ZargonX link=topic=1950.msg55333#msg55333 date=1229305330]
[quote author=Geoff link=topic=1950.msg55317#msg55317 date=1229296609]
Does anyone even read spectacle rock but us?  ???

If anyone has any "marketing" suggestions, let me know.
[/quote]

Start submitting things to digg, redit, ect
[/quote]

Yup, I've got things going out to all the aggregators, and I've been submitting to Digg, etc.  Eventually something will stick!

Re: New Article - Scary Womanizing Pig Mask - 12-14-2008

(12-14-2008, 10:57 PM)ZargonX link Wrote: [quote author=CaffeinePowered link=topic=1950.msg55366#msg55366 date=1229312463]
[quote author=ZargonX link=topic=1950.msg55333#msg55333 date=1229305330]
[quote author=Geoff link=topic=1950.msg55317#msg55317 date=1229296609]
Does anyone even read spectacle rock but us?  ???

If anyone has any "marketing" suggestions, let me know.
[/quote]

Start submitting things to digg, redit, ect
[/quote]

Yup, I've got things going out to all the aggregators, and I've been submitting to Digg, etc.  Eventually something will stick!
[/quote]

I read an article that Digg is super hierarchical, and all about a group of users circle jerking each other, while their sycophants digg everything they submit. Kind of hard to break through Tongue But it helps me find funny pictures, so who am I to complain?