This does not exist. - fyre - 03-23-2009
...
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - Mission Difficult - 03-23-2009
I'd be up for it.
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - ToiletDuck - 03-24-2009
what's it about?
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - fyre - 03-24-2009
Ehh...I haven't finished it yet. I'll probably post it later. It's for a short film. The idea is to include various distinct genres into one film.
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - Surf314 - 03-24-2009
I have been struck by amnesia.
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - at0m - 03-24-2009
a film script? or script, as in programming?
because i'm shit at the former and the shit at the latter.
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - CaffeinePowered - 03-24-2009
(03-24-2009, 09:22 AM)at0m link Wrote: a film script? or script, as in programming?
because i'm shit at the former and the shit at the latter.
What about a film script written in programing code?
Code: if (juliet_alive(juliet) == 0)
{
  romeo_drink(poison);
}
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - fyre - 03-24-2009
^
lol
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - at0m - 03-24-2009
(03-24-2009, 09:38 AM)Caffeine link Wrote: [quote author=at0m link=topic=2548.msg72721#msg72721 date=1237904561]
a film script? or script, as in programming?
because i'm shit at the former and the shit at the latter.
What about a film script written in programing code?
Code: if (juliet_alive(juliet) == 0)
{
   romeo_drink(poison);
}
[/quote]I think I could handle that, actually.
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - at0m - 03-24-2009
Code: #define TITLE "The Rock"
#define TRUE 1
#define FALSE 0
typedef struct {
 bool cares,
} nobody_typ; //placeholder
typedef struct {
 char actor_name[80],
 char position[80],
 char specialty[80],
} fbi_typ;
typedef struct {
 char actor_name[80],
 char subtype[80],
} badass_typ;
typedef struct {
 char actress_name[80],
 usint hotness,
 bool pregnant,
 bool engaged,
} girlfriend_typ;
void action( void* character1, void* character2, char* act );
void dialog( void* character1, void* character2, char* diag );
bool request( void* requestor, void* requestee, char* req );
usint status( void* character, char* property );
static fbi_typ stanley_goodspeed {
 "Nicholas Cage",
 "agent",
 "biochemistry / bomb defusal",
};
static girlfriend_typ carla_pestalozzi {
 "Vanessa Marcil",
 10, //prom queen
 TRUE,
 TRUE,
};
static fbi_typ some_guy {
 "I have no fucking clue",
 "red shirt",
 "being a red shirt",
};
static fbi_typ some_other_guy {
 "I have no fucking clue",
 "red shirt",
 "being a red shirt",
};
static fbi_typ james_womak {
 "John Spencer",
 "director",
 "being an asshole",
};
static badass_typ john_patrick_mason {
 "Sean connery",
 "ex-convict",
};
static badass_typ francis_x_hummel {
 "Ed Harris",
 "Brig. General, USMC",
};
static nobody_typ nobody {
 FALSE,
};
void main(void) {
 while( status(carla_pestalozzi, "dressed_as_schoolgirl") ) {
  action(stanley_goodspeed, carla_pestalozzi, "hump");
  if( status(stanley_goodspeed, "phone_ringing) ) { //coitus interruptus
   break;
  }
 }
 action(stanley_goodspeed, some_guy, "try to disarm a bomb");
 if( status(some_guy, "dumbass") ) {
  dialog(stanley_goodspeed, some_other_guy, "my suit is dissolving");
  dialog(some_other_guy, stanley_goodspeed, "stick it in your heart");
  dialog(some_guy, some_other_guy, "FUCK THAT");
  action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "save the fucking day");
 }
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 if( carla_pestalozzi.Pregnant ) {
  dialog(carla_pestalozzi, stanley_goodspeed, "i'm pregnant");
  dialog(stanley_goodspeed, carla_pestalozzi, "wat");
 }
 action(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "steal a bunch of biochemical weapons"); //other characters are negligible
 action(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "take over alcatraz");Â
 request(john_spencer, stanley_goodspeed, "come disarm this shit too");
 action(john_spencer, nobody, "free(john_patrick_mason)");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, john_patrick_mason, "infiltrate alcatraz");
 action(francis_x_hummel, some_seals, "kill");
 action(john_patrick_mason, some_marines, "kill");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "disarm some chemical weapons");
 dialog(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "we have a rat");
 action(john_patrick_mason, fucking_everyone, "kill");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "disarm some more chemical weapons");
 dialog(john_spencer, nobody, "zomg cleanse the island...BY FIRE");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, random_crazy, "stuff biochemical thing in face");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, stanley_goodspeed, "stab adrenaline into heart");
 if( status(john_patrick_mason, "alive") ) {
  free(john_patrick_mason);
 }
 dialog(john_spencer, stanley_goodspeed, "status(john_patrick_mason, "alive")?");
 dialog(stanley_goodspeed, john_spencer, "FALSE");
 exit("happily ever after");
}
>_>
<_<
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - CaffeinePowered - 03-24-2009
Wow, I can't believe that A, you took time to write that, and B, that I could actually follow it...
+1
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - Darklink - 03-24-2009
(03-24-2009, 10:45 AM)at0m link Wrote: Code: #define TITLE "The Rock"
#define TRUE 1
#define FALSE 0
typedef struct {
 bool cares,
} nobody_typ; //placeholder
typedef struct {
 char actor_name[80],
 char position[80],
 char specialty[80],
} fbi_typ;
typedef struct {
 char actor_name[80],
 char subtype[80],
} badass_typ;
typedef struct {
 char actress_name[80],
 usint hotness,
 bool pregnant,
 bool engaged,
} girlfriend_typ;
void action( void* character1, void* character2, char* act );
void dialog( void* character1, void* character2, char* diag );
bool request( void* requestor, void* requestee, char* req );
usint status( void* character, char* property );
static fbi_typ stanley_goodspeed {
 "Nicholas Cage",
 "agent",
 "biochemistry / bomb defusal",
};
static girlfriend_typ carla_pestalozzi {
 "Vanessa Marcil",
 10, //prom queen
 TRUE,
 TRUE,
};
static fbi_typ some_guy {
 "I have no fucking clue",
 "red shirt",
 "being a red shirt",
};
static fbi_typ some_other_guy {
 "I have no fucking clue",
 "red shirt",
 "being a red shirt",
};
static fbi_typ james_womak {
 "John Spencer",
 "director",
 "being an asshole",
};
static badass_typ john_patrick_mason {
 "Sean connery",
 "ex-convict",
};
static badass_typ francis_x_hummel {
 "Ed Harris",
 "Brig. General, USMC",
};
static nobody_typ nobody {
 FALSE,
};
void main(void) {
 while( status(carla_pestalozzi, "dressed_as_schoolgirl") ) {
  action(stanley_goodspeed, carla_pestalozzi, "hump");
  if( status(stanley_goodspeed, "phone_ringing) ) { //coitus interruptus
   break;
  }
 }
 action(stanley_goodspeed, some_guy, "try to disarm a bomb");
 if( status(some_guy, "dumbass") ) {
  dialog(stanley_goodspeed, some_other_guy, "my suit is dissolving");
  dialog(some_other_guy, stanley_goodspeed, "stick it in your heart");
  dialog(some_guy, some_other_guy, "FUCK THAT");
  action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "save the fucking day");
 }
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 if( carla_pestalozzi.Pregnant ) {
  dialog(carla_pestalozzi, stanley_goodspeed, "i'm pregnant");
  dialog(stanley_goodspeed, carla_pestalozzi, "wat");
 }
 action(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "steal a bunch of biochemical weapons"); //other characters are negligible
 action(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "take over alcatraz");Â
 request(john_spencer, stanley_goodspeed, "come disarm this shit too");
 action(john_spencer, nobody, "free(john_patrick_mason)");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, john_patrick_mason, "infiltrate alcatraz");
 action(francis_x_hummel, some_seals, "kill");
 action(john_patrick_mason, some_marines, "kill");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "disarm some chemical weapons");
 dialog(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "we have a rat");
 action(john_patrick_mason, fucking_everyone, "kill");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "disarm some more chemical weapons");
 dialog(john_spencer, nobody, "zomg cleanse the island...BY FIRE");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, random_crazy, "stuff biochemical thing in face");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, stanley_goodspeed, "stab adrenaline into heart");
 if( status(john_patrick_mason, "alive") ) {
  free(john_patrick_mason);
 }
 dialog(john_spencer, stanley_goodspeed, "status(john_patrick_mason, "alive")?");
 dialog(stanley_goodspeed, john_spencer, "FALSE");
 exit("happily ever after");
}
>_>
<_< +1 every hour for the rest of my life
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - K2 - 03-24-2009
(03-24-2009, 10:53 AM)Caffeine link Wrote: Wow, I can't believe that A, you took time to write that, and B, that I could actually follow it...
+1
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - rumsfald - 03-25-2009
We have some local expertise at criticizing scripts.
(05-12-2008, 09:09 AM)Kor link Wrote: [quote author=CaffeinePowered link=topic=270.msg6376#msg6376 date=1210561707]
I bet scripts are why I end up #1 or #2 90% of the time too huh?
Washed up.
[/quote]
(05-12-2008, 07:23 PM)rumsfald link Wrote: Scripts are like fake tits. They may be spectacular and finish in the #1 or #2 spot of 90% of wet T-shirt nights, but they are no replacement for the real thing.
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - fyre - 03-25-2009
I'm not gonna finish this. At least, not right now. Forget this ever happened.
Re: This does not exist. - Luca Shoal - 03-25-2009
Re: This does not exist. - Dave - 03-26-2009
quitter
Re: This does not exist. - If-I-Die-Its-Lag - 03-26-2009
Wait...How come I can still see it? You said it does not exist, yet it still exist...
WHY DOES IT HAVE TO TORMENT ME? WHY?
Re: This does not exist. - at0m - 03-26-2009
I posted a reply that was so epic, the OP ceased to exist.
Re: Anyone wanna critique a script... - at0m - 04-29-2009
(03-24-2009, 03:24 PM)Darklink link Wrote: [quote author=at0m link=topic=2548.msg72730#msg72730 date=1237909504]
Code: #define TITLE "The Rock"
#define TRUE 1
#define FALSE 0
typedef struct {
 bool cares,
} nobody_typ; //placeholder
typedef struct {
 char actor_name[80],
 char position[80],
 char specialty[80],
} fbi_typ;
typedef struct {
 char actor_name[80],
 char subtype[80],
} badass_typ;
typedef struct {
 char actress_name[80],
 usint hotness,
 bool pregnant,
 bool engaged,
} girlfriend_typ;
void action( void* character1, void* character2, char* act );
void dialog( void* character1, void* character2, char* diag );
bool request( void* requestor, void* requestee, char* req );
usint status( void* character, char* property );
static fbi_typ stanley_goodspeed {
 "Nicholas Cage",
 "agent",
 "biochemistry / bomb defusal",
};
static girlfriend_typ carla_pestalozzi {
 "Vanessa Marcil",
 10, //prom queen
 TRUE,
 TRUE,
};
static fbi_typ some_guy {
 "I have no fucking clue",
 "red shirt",
 "being a red shirt",
};
static fbi_typ some_other_guy {
 "I have no fucking clue",
 "red shirt",
 "being a red shirt",
};
static fbi_typ james_womak {
 "John Spencer",
 "director",
 "being an asshole",
};
static badass_typ john_patrick_mason {
 "Sean connery",
 "ex-convict",
};
static badass_typ francis_x_hummel {
 "Ed Harris",
 "Brig. General, USMC",
};
static nobody_typ nobody {
 FALSE,
};
void main(void) {
 while( status(carla_pestalozzi, "dressed_as_schoolgirl") ) {
  action(stanley_goodspeed, carla_pestalozzi, "hump");
  if( status(stanley_goodspeed, "phone_ringing) ) { //coitus interruptus
   break;
  }
 }
 action(stanley_goodspeed, some_guy, "try to disarm a bomb");
 if( status(some_guy, "dumbass") ) {
  dialog(stanley_goodspeed, some_other_guy, "my suit is dissolving");
  dialog(some_other_guy, stanley_goodspeed, "stick it in your heart");
  dialog(some_guy, some_other_guy, "FUCK THAT");
  action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "save the fucking day");
 }
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 if( carla_pestalozzi.Pregnant ) {
  dialog(carla_pestalozzi, stanley_goodspeed, "i'm pregnant");
  dialog(stanley_goodspeed, carla_pestalozzi, "wat");
 }
 action(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "steal a bunch of biochemical weapons"); //other characters are negligible
 action(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "take over alcatraz");Â
 request(john_spencer, stanley_goodspeed, "come disarm this shit too");
 action(john_spencer, nobody, "free(john_patrick_mason)");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, john_patrick_mason, "infiltrate alcatraz");
 action(francis_x_hummel, some_seals, "kill");
 action(john_patrick_mason, some_marines, "kill");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "disarm some chemical weapons");
 dialog(francis_x_hummel, nobody, "we have a rat");
 action(john_patrick_mason, fucking_everyone, "kill");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, nobody, "disarm some more chemical weapons");
 dialog(john_spencer, nobody, "zomg cleanse the island...BY FIRE");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, random_crazy, "stuff biochemical thing in face");
 action(stanley_goodspeed, stanley_goodspeed, "stab adrenaline into heart");
 if( status(john_patrick_mason, "alive") ) {
  free(john_patrick_mason);
 }
 dialog(john_spencer, stanley_goodspeed, "status(john_patrick_mason, "alive")?");
 dialog(stanley_goodspeed, john_spencer, "FALSE");
 exit("happily ever after");
}
>_>
<_< +1 every hour for the rest of my life
[/quote]D:
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